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0910,
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{910,4}

((alaaqah dil kaa likhvaa))egaa daftar haath se tere
tajarrud ke jariido;N me;N qalam-saa fard hogaa tuu

1) it will cause to be written an account-book of the correspondence/commerce of the heart, by your hand
2) in the registers/'barenesses' of solitude, you will be, like a pen/writing, a singularity/record/statement

 

Notes:

((alaaqah : 'Attachment, connection, dependence, relation, affinity; concern, interest; part; reference, bearing (to), relevancy; commerce (with), intercourse, correspondence, communication'. (Platts p.763)

 

daftar : 'A roll, scroll, list; an index; a bundle of papers or written documents tied together in a cloth; a record, register, journal, book, volume, account-book'. (Platts p.519)

 

tajarrud : 'Stripping or denuding oneself; cutting oneself off from society, living in solitude; solitude; celibacy'. (Platts p.311)

 

jariidah : 'Bare; solitary, alone, separate, unattended (when travelling), unencumbered; —s.m. A tally (by which to keep accounts); account-book; register; volume, book'. (Platts p.380)

 

qalam : 'A reed; reed-pen, pen; a pencil; a painter's brush;... ;—a mode of writing, character, handwriting'. (Platts p.794)

 

fard : 'Single, sole, only, one (and no more); singular; odd; unique, unequalled, incomparable; ...  a single sheet or strip (of paper); ... a draft (of an account); a register, record, statement, account-sheet'. (Platts p.778)

S. R. Faruqi:

In this verse there's such a 'hot market' for affinities and wordplay as would scarcely be found anywhere. Thus ((alaaqah means 'relationship', but ((alaaqah likhvaanaa also means 'to record a land or realm, etc., in someone's name'. Thus ((alaaqah has an affinity with likhvaanaa , and they both have an affinity with daftar (because when there's an ((alaaqah , then there will also be a daftar with an account of its papers, notes, income and expenses).

Then, tere haath se likhvaa))egaa -- that is, it will compel you to write, to go on writing. The meaning of tajarrud is 'solitude', and the meaning of jariidah is daftar , or a journal or newspaper. But tajarrud also means 'unmarried'. Thus 'solitude' is of two kinds. And in the records [daftar] of solitude too, you will be fard (that is, 'single, alone', and 'unique'). But daftar also means 'list', and a solitary verse is also called fard , and a piece of paper too is called fard , and then fard also means 'individual person'. (For example, us makaan me;N chaar fard rahte hai;N .)

Then, with regard to the affinity of likhvaanaa , daftar , jariidah , and fard itself, there is qalam . And there's an affinity too between tajarrud and qalam , because a pen is straight like the letter alif , and alif is a symbol of ek , which is usually alone. (For this reason, alif is also a symbol of oneness.) If we take qalam-saa to be Persian, then the meaning emerges [from saayiidan] as 'rubbing/rubber of a pen'. That is, 'in the offices of solitude, you alone will be pen-rubbing'.

In short, it's a singular picture-gallery, in which the intellect is stupefied. To call the pen 'solitary' is Mir's invention. For in [the dictionary] bahaar-e ((ajam there's no mention of it. Why he has called the pen 'solitary', I have already explained above. Then, there's also the point that the pen goes on moving forward, and its written words go on being left behind. This too is a proof of its solitude.

In the third divan, Mir himself has said [{1227,4}]:

uns agar un nau-;xa:taan-e shahr se man:zuur hai
apnii parchhaa))ii;N se bhii juu;N ;xaamah tum va;hshat karo

[if you seek affection from those newly-downy-cheeked ones of the city
show wildness/panic toward your own shadow, as a pen does]

This verse is not very good. He has brought in the pen because of the affinity with nau-;xa:taan [since ;xa:t also means 'line, handwriting, letter'], that's all. But at the present verse, Shakespeare himself would have been entranced.

FWP:

SETS == GENERATORS; WORDPLAY
MOTIFS == COMMERCE
NAMES
TERMS == AFFINITY; WORDPLAY

SRF considers this to be a 'continuous' ghazal; for discussion, see {910,1}.

This verse indeed demands to be part of at least a 'verse-sequence', if not a 'continuous ghazal', because within the verse itself we have no subject for the first line. Who or what will 'cause you to write'? Only from verse {910,2} can we learn that the subject is 'passion' (or perhaps, technically, the 'practice of passion'). And only from verse {910,1} can we learn why 'passion' will be able to do this.

Here's a verse so utterly criss-crossed with fault lines of wordplay that you could break it almost anywhere and take it in several directions, for various permutations of meaning. It makes my head spin! It's almost entirely untranslatable, as you can see from my clumsy and overloaded-- but still very incomplete!-- attempt above.